Gorgeous trees of amber shade
Sun's rays stretch across the land
Leaves woven into a tight braid
The birds create a symphonic band
The shades of brilliant gold
Blue wondrous rivers
Nature never gets old
With the beauty it delivers
The heart only grows stronger
In a place such as this
Beauty always lasts longer
Even with winters first kiss
Music is precious and ever present
Love seems to find a home there
Not one piece of nature's unpleasant
So peaceful most everything seems fair
At night the sky turns dark
Not eerie but calm
The north star is the mark
And the world is the size of your palm
Morning wakes
The world comes alive
All it takes
Is for the array of colors to arrive
Every day nature's changing
Every moment it's growing
The leaves are always rearranging
And the atmosphere easygoing
Keep the natural world precious in your heart
Never let your memory forget the wonder
That nature plays the lead roles part
In all the gorgeous world of Earth that lies under
Your feet, your toes, your eyes
In nature there are no lies
Author notes
A and B rhyming scheme 
(every other line)
A contest entry
- 5385 Points --- Winner Take All by mrme.
5385 points, ended October 28, 2008, 29 entries
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Comments
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So true:
"Nature never gets old
With the beauty it delivers"
I'm about to go outside and mingle with nature. I have some seashells I found thrown out that I want to put in my garden. I so do not understand persons trashing so many usable and recyclable items out that you'd think I would have mentioned in my poem.
Yesterday, I found lots of big and bitty shells while straightening up the remnants of a church garage sale set curbside as trash. I'm not sure why they didn't put their paper items inside their recycle dumpster they get money for recycling. I filled that dumpster 2/3's full of paper that might yield more than they got from garage sale. Meanwhile, too, I found books to donate and seashells to keep. Sort of like a gift from the heavens for being a good steward of the earth. To think all those items would have wasted landfill space when instead could have been donated or recycled as I did.
Kudos to you from Recycle Momma of Dallas, for such a lovely poem about nature. My motto is: Improve earth and children's fate: Conserve, Recycle and Donate... And you can quote me.
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Wow. Excellent write. very descriptive, very thoughtful, nice rhythm and flow to this write.
I would offer 2 small suggestions to make this (in my humble opinion) a very strong contender.
1. the lines:
Not one piece of nature's unpleasant
So peaceful most everything seems fair
are a bit weak in comparison to the rest of the poem. You may want to consider replacing them with something more descriptive and in tone with the rest of your poem.
2. I wouldn't change the flow from 4 line verses to 6 as you did in the last verse. I think I know why you did it, but it breaks up the rhythm a bit.
I would have preferred to see the last verse keep the rhythm of the other 4 line verses.
It's your poem, feel free to ignore my comments.
Excellent write nonetheless.
Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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A beautiful piece on nature, great metephoric discription. Such and easy flow that it is easy to read through more than once.
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