You told her that you love her but you don't
I've been trying to make this work but you won't
You tell her that she's beautiful almost every day
yet aside from that little phrase, you have nothing to say
What am I to you?
I love daisies and I've said so dear
What is it that I haven't made clear?
I've said it over and over, through and through
Yes, oh YES, Oh- I Love you.
I'd dance with you in the rain,
whether it be wind or snow
I'd pick a star from the sky
and give it to you, you know
I'd do anything for you, I've said it
but what I get back isn't the same
Maybe it would be best to leave where it's at
instead of trying to play this game
of Loooovveee
It hurts so bad when you don't say it back
but I can't help from telling
My mind stars rushing, my face is sad
my eyes wet, start swelling
and I cry.
Because as much as I love you
I don't think that you love me.
lemme kno what u think
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I'd dance with you in the rain,
whether it be wind or snow
I'd pick a star from the sky
and give it to you, you know
This stanza is absolutley gorgeous and I feel your pain through this poem. However
I'm a little confused by your and I cry line. It just doesn't seem to fit, like you were trying so hard to get the rhyme that you stuck it somewhere else, just an opinion. But other than that beautiful and heartfelt -
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the "and I cry" was just another expression in the poem. just like the "of love" and "what am i to you".. kind of makes the poem seem a bit more personal. Thanks though, for your comment =-).
greatly appreciated
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ommmggggggg
i been in this position sooo many times and i never been able to explain it like this so congrats
if you wanna write something together
my pen is ready
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we can if you want to. my email would be the best way of writing together. or myspace. i don't check this as much as those.
nativenoodle32@hotmail.com --> just put ap in the subject line
or add me on myspace myspace.com/mdizzle1988
whatever works!
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It's really hard to give our all to someone and to get nothing back in return. It hurts, and you're right when you say that you should stop playing this game. When you're putting in all this energy and you're getting nothing in return, and you're not getting any recharge of energy, it really saps the life out of you. I think you've made an effective use of punctuation and spelling in this poem, especially the 'Loooovveee' part. In my humble opinion, I think you should dump this guy and get him out of your life and go find someone who is worthy of your time and your energy. Only in that way will you know a love that will love you back in return. Good luck!
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;_; welcome to my life bro. Love it. check out my own poem on this topic; "Midnight Sun"
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yay! u left me a comment! i missed u! haha =-)
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