In the park we stand,
Autumn breeze still lingering on the mid november day,
We look at each other,
Through the frosty downpour,
You slowly lean down,
Take my chin in your hand,
Pull my head up,
I stand on the tips of my toes,
And we kiss,
The silent down pour around us,
Soaking us through,
And making us,
Only stand closer,
To keep warm,
Your free hand slides down my arm,
Onto my back,
You pull me even closer to you,
Holding me there,
With your iron grip,
Our lips moving at a frantic pace,
The perfect kiss,
It last for a few more minutes,
The rain becoming harder,
And colder,
Beating down on us from the heavens,
You slowly pull away from me,
Still keeping my body positioned up against yours,
You say,
I love you.
And then pull me into a kiss again,
Under the rain we stand,
The autumn breeze still lingering on the mid november's eve.
Author notes
My name is XxMissBrokenHeartxX or Stef, and **Heartbroken-Headcase**
A contest entry
- FIRST KISS IN THE POURING RAIN! by Bohemianwriter.
850 points, ended October 22, 2008, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - First contest,Four options, i'll love you forever if you enter? by Jaffa-.
560 points, ended November 11, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I had to do all i could to stop myself from sending you a big AWW *woops* This was utterly flawless imagery and i loved it. Yyou can feel the rain against your skin and everything. One thing... i asked you to put some things in the author notes do you think you could go back and do that please
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Wow, great poem.
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a soft view of a quiet yet deep passion.
beautiful piece
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Very beautiful and sensual
with some lovely imagery here.
Good luck to you in this contest
with this one!
Jeremy0826 -
WOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I ABSOLUTLEY HAVE FALLEN IN LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE WITH THIS!!!! THIS WAS ABSOLUTLEY EXACTLY WHAT I WANTED!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS WAS JUST.....AAAAH I LOOOVED EVERYBIT OF IT!!!!!!! THIS COULDNT HAE BEEN DONE ANYBETTER! WORDS CANT DESCRIBE HOWMUCH I ADORE THIS POEM!! WOOOOW WHAT A TRULY TRULY TRULY TRULY AMAZING!, MESMERIZING!, BREATH TAKINGLY GREAT WRITE!!!!!
THANK YOU SOOMUCH FOR ENTERING!!!!!
GOOD LUCK!!!!!
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beautifuly written!
good luck in the contest!!
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