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Eyes Closed, Mind Open

A mortuary disguised as conglomerate corporation
reeking of corpses a'bustle
yet to relinquish forsaken breath
automated cadavers poised
like wretched puppets dangling from chains
in an orchestrated macabre tango
of the spiritually disenfranchised.

Author notes

Probably not what you were lookin for, but rather than write about the prompt "I close my eyes" I performed the action and jotted down what spewed forth.

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  • going nowhere
    October 9, 2008

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    wow.. never thought of acting the prompt out... THAT is creative for sure. made me smile thinking of you doing that... haha. thank you.


  • VerminVomit
    October 8, 2008

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    its one of those poems you just read over and over and over again and never get bored of...
    "like wretched puppets dangling from chains
    orchestrated macabre tango" are the best parts


  • seven
    October 8, 2008

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    loved the bit "like wretched puppets dangling from chains/orchestrated macabre tango"

    this is like something from my nightmares