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noteworthy outpourings

I wouldn't say that I ask a lot
give me a glass slipper
over a blue suede shoe any day

 

I've been around

but mostly square

 

and know the candle

burns the same at both ends

after the flame has settled

 

that's usually when I pick

my bleeding heart up like a banjo

that's out of tune with the blues

and begin to play

 

and when my neighbor decides

it's time to mow the fucking lawn

 

 

Author notes

PROMPT: "If I did not want others to violate my life, how could I voluntarily violate it myself?"

~Page 253 - "Black Boy" by Richard Wright~

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  • She Stole My Voice
    October 11, 2008

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    'I've been around
    but mostly square "
    How do you come up with genius lines like that?
    and my favorite is:
    "that's usually when I pick
    my bleeding heart up like a banjo
    that's out of tune with the blues
    and begin to play "
    Fucking fantastic.
    ♥ ♥


    -Mary


  • poetryality silver member
    October 10, 2008

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    The first line is something I have said to my husband right before every argument we've had. LOL Your faced-paced, reality look at violating ourselves is humorous and if we can't laugh at ourselves, we surely will cry. Great take on the prompt and thanks for the chuckles. I wish you well in this challenge.



    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Cannonsfire
    October 9, 2008
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    LOL Then tune it properly and he'll listen in


  • lunarlunacy
    October 8, 2008

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    yet another classic Shelter "Ive been around, but mostly square"... man that had me cackling with laughter. "when I pick

    my bleeding heart up like a banjo

    that's out of tune with the blues " - some heavy mojo there. Always refreshing to get a peek inside that warped noodle of yours.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Kick ass!!!! I freakin love this! Your words always hold so much depth and you really know how to make a prompt your own!


  • penman gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    Wonderful

    A great creation for the theme. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.

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