Cobwebs of the mind
Rusted hinges of the skull
Toys in the attic
Rattle my Cage,
is the Beast Alive?
Throw him some Meat,
for he is Hungry!
Food for thought.
Water of Life,
for he is Thirsty!
He has been forgotten
and left alone
to ponder in induced egocentricity,
like a mad scientist
who can’t find the door out,
and eventually no longer looks.
A contest entry
- Make Me Feel Again.... by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended October 14, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Did it make ya think and/or feel?
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Aw... The poor beast
But since he was forsaken for a long time, who think he would lose it by now? It makes me smile to see the beast's anger grow with in as he still being in a cage never to be freed. I like it. It's very tastefull. Good luck, beast within... -
there is a creature which can only be seen in the dreams directly rooted inside the first baby thought of a DNA researcher, and that is a creature's stippling dots as it walks across the surface of liquid jello of mysterious hue, when viewed from beneath and drowing in it. ya know? see, what happens is when this particular genre of writing, and it is full of finesse, like that of a kick boxer finishing off an attacker, not kind, nor cruel, simply final, done with surety and purpose and then walking away, i can't walk away but begin to drone on ... hehehehehehehe
i learned a long time ago, choose your judges well, and do not cast x before y ...
Moqui
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This certainly allowed room for feeling and thought. A pained sense of expression, begging to be acknowledged. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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not so much achknowledgement as inspiration, thanx glad ya enjoyed.
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-"like a mad scientist
who can't find the door out,
and eventually no longer looks." <--wow...it echos in my head....
-the 3rd stanza sounds kinda weak...
-the title's great
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