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Surrender To Me

I’ve tasted your kiss

It’s as sweet as winter’s bliss

I tried not to stare

But not looking at you, I would feel so empty

Because my eyes wouldn’t be able to look anywhere.

 

Hold me in your arms

And surrender your love to me

There’s no where you can run or hide

Because I’ll be by your side till the very end.

 

I’ve studied your face

It’s as smooth as winter’s embrace

I tried not to touch

But each hormone in my body is moving in such a rush.

 

Hold me in your arms

And surrender your love to me

There’s no where you can run or hide

Because I’ll be by your side till the very end.

 

Surrender to me my love

I don’t want to have to wait any longer

Let me wrap my arms around you

Just follow the sound of my voice....

Surrender to me my love!

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 14, 2008

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    that sound like bliss in my eyes, i would surrender, but then again that is just me talking, keep it flowing my friend.

  • Bob Fox
    October 15, 2008

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    Love

    always such a splendid word. a word only the poet can take and expand to further greatness. and his arms await you young poet. I am sure many young bucks on here have their arms out now.


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 12, 2008

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    I guess you love the winter and I know why being in this hot desert, unlike people dreading the winter where snow chills keep them indoors and hurts their bones!!! this is a very passionate write and i feel the love pouring onto your lover and I savour each line of this very beautiful write!

    Brilliant!

    Lencio


    • chilali
      October 12, 2008
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      Thank you

      Yes, I do love the Winter, even though, I do get cold really quickly and sick. Haha. The purity of the snow and how it even makes the world look so pure with its white blanket is why I love the winter. Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely comment. I am glad you enjoyed it


  • November-Dani
    October 11, 2008

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    I just CANT write song lyrics. You did great here. I am a muso and so not being able to write lyrics can be annoying. Its a skill i wish to aquire. Well done!
    Dani.

  • silverfish
    October 9, 2008

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    truly, a poem begotten of a woman in love. a sweet surrender to the desires of the heart. -silverfish


  • MD Masroor
    October 9, 2008

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    'Surrender to me my love'. These words, though small, are strong and bold. I really like how you made your whole poem revolve around that particular line, and connected every line somehow to the other. A true work of art of poetry Ylova. I'm impressed. Beautiful work, keep it up!


  • Hikari Lady
    October 9, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL, Ylova!!! I loved these lines:
    "I’ve studied your face
    It’s as smooth as winter’s embrace
    I tried not to touch
    But each hormone in my body is moving in such a rush."

    I know this feeling, it's sweet as it's hard to endure. This is a very deep song, you're good at lyrics. I as well liked the repeated stanza.


  • Nephlim
    October 9, 2008

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    I loved the line that you had repeating =] so there was a very good chorus too. The only thing I could suggest is to make it a little bit longer . What kind of genre of music would it be?
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


    • chilali
      October 9, 2008
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      Thank you

      It would be rock Next time, I'll write longer songs for you


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Surrendering devotion the warmth the love, in Winters deplete.
    The flow and softness of this love song is beautiful
    The melody must also be too
    Julie x


  • Mujtaba H Zaidi
    October 9, 2008

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    Superb...

    What a magnificent expression of unconditional devotion and beautiful feelings of unabated love to your soulmate, my dear friend. It is undoubtedly a noteworthy piece of literature, which narrates the unbound joy and unquenching thirst of love and passion.. Carry on dear poetess!!!


  • myrataal silver member
    October 9, 2008

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    Ah ... Such yearning in this song poem ...

    and yes: completely surrending to the beloved, waiting for the response in return.

    Such persistent, passionate love should be answered.

    Well done, Ylova.
    Love
    Myra


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    aww.wow. love your lyrics. sing them
    hehe. keep writtting 'Stephanie


  • JinSays gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Ahhh, you're just as sweet as can be in this song love. Your heart is pure, and hungry, and it wants love.
    Very well expressed, and I can only hope he got the message?..
    Very well done,
    jin


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 8, 2008

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    I really enjoyed the reference to Winter and it's bliss and embrace; very lovely
    The whole poem flows wonderfully down the page like a song to the heart

    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    AW!!! SO SWEET!!!!

    Such sweet and tender words which would melt the hardest heart! 's


  • Ink4Blood
    October 8, 2008

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    Wow Ylova, another masterpiece you have penned here. I can only guess what was running through your mind and your heart when you penned this piece. But i know one thing, it was a great muse. I had better get working on Friend Stew, hadn't I? xD

    Mucho Love,
    Justin


    • chilali
      October 9, 2008

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      Thank you

      Hahaha. Thank you Justin And yes, Friend Stew! If you need more help, let me know

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