It’s the sight of you, the scent of you
Oh, my body just knows when you’re near
Heart racing, heat rising
Taken over by just your presence
I can’t slow my…
…Breathing you in as you hold me
Lips caught in a wicked dance
Hands tracing already memorized curves
My soul consumed by just one touch
Drifting off as I’m nestled…
…In your arms I find home
Safety washing over every inch of me
Your steady heart beat calms me easily
The rise and fall of your chest is perfection
Heaven must be us…
…Connected as one, moving together
Perfect harmony to some un-sung song
Breaths catching as lips clash
Hearts pounding, arms clinging
Oh, how I love…
…You. The sight of you, the scent of you
I’m captivated completely by everything about you
Around my finger is more than a ring
I proudly display your heart and mine
Showing always and forever…with you.
*~Abigail~*
Author notes
option 1:Love
Krymsin Kyss
I love you Ben
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Lovely and a little wicked
I like how at the end of the stanza you led us to think...
, then moved onward into the next stanza. A lovely, somewhat lively, and a little bit wicked piece.
Very nice!
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This is really..absolutely amazing..beautiful..
I loved it!
In your arms I find home
Safety washing over every inch of me
Your steady heart beat calms me easily
The rise and fall of your chest is perfection
Heaven must be us…
My fav part
Thanks for entering
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This is so beautiful.
So full of love.
Made me aww outloud.
I love your use of the ellipsis, ending and beginning each stanza. and I love the lines:
Safety washing over every inch of me
Your steady heart beat calms me easily
So... just, lovely.
I can't think of a better word.
Thank you, I truly enjoyed reading this.
ElectricBloom -
This is absolutely beautiful. It says everything I want to say to my lover, but don't quite know how to.
I love the form it was written in, and the pattern of the extended stanzas.
Thank you so much for entering!
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There are two loves in the world that are the most sacred; the lovers, and the love between parent and child. You capture both easily within your writing each time I read your poetry, my dear. I've never known what it's like to have a mother's bond, but I certainly know how it feels to have instant calm when my lover is near. That is certainly something I understand and appreciate, especially reading another over of your lovely pieces. Well done.
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