I’ve violated my promise
Not to proceed.
I didn't do any of the things
I agreed to.
Imprisoned by circumstances.
I didn't resist,
just let trivial matters sap
my vigour,
my life.
I’ve punished myself with silence.
Author notes
PROMPT: "If I did not want others to violate my life, how could I voluntarily violate it myself?" - limitation: 50 words
A contest entry
- Quote Quickie by poetryality.
600 points, ended October 10, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ah..once again..you have summed up your self through the deepest images of the life bringing the surprising element to understand the truth of yours..just a wonderful write you did..well done...
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Given the limited word usage, you did an outstanding job here poet. I felt these words. You opened the poem with gripping thoughts. To "violate a promise" to ourselves leaves us shrouded in shame.
We make deals with ourselves and go back on them constantly. You captured that with skill in the second line.
"Imprisoned by circumstances."
What a heavy-laden experience. I know...
The last line makes me know that now is the time to confront, make amends, and forgive myself.
Excellent! Thank you for this intense entry and I wish you the best in this challenge.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thank You!
Thank you for the contest Renee. Many thanks for my first gold. You've made my day! Your poetry is the best, so I feel honored that you take the time to read between my lines.
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YOUR FIRST GOLD!
CONGRATULATIONS AGAIN!
You go gurl! And keep it movin'. I Love Ya!
This has been a Sarah Palin moment.
Seriously, GREAT WORK!
Renee
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Ah, that's a strong topic to discuss, I think. You did a good job with it too! I really like how you started off with your thoughtful-ness (engaging to me!) and I was sad when you finished this poem so soon! I was hoping you'd go into more detail, since I liked where you were going with this! That's okay though--I still enjoyed reading!
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