The sun caresses her soft skin
as the curtain creates funny shades upon her body
She smiles to someone in her sleep,
turns around and grabs the blanket
heading for a last dream until
the horrible sound of the alarmclock will wake her up
He has been looking at this wonderful scene for the last hour
wishing he should never sleep
so that he wouldn't miss a thing from her
a second of her life
He would catch every single breath of her if he could
watch every single step for a thousand times
take a picture of every smile
Everytime she tells him she loves him
he gets goose skin, his heart skips a beat
And to him the most wonderful thing in this world
is the fact that she loves him just as much as he loves her
He moves his pillow
tries to get closer to her
He can feel her body heat now
and as he touches her hair
he whispers 'I love you'
Then he takes the cushion
places it on her face
and he soffocates her before se even realises what is happening
He hugs her dead body for the last time,
gets up and puts his fingers on the phone
911
"I killed my girlfriend
so that nobody could ever love her like I do"
Author notes
Contest
16. "I have always thought the actions of men the best interpreters of their thoughts" -John LOCKE
Irrational thoughts can kill
And actions aren't always what they seem to be
A contest entry
- Quote Prompts....This will be interesting by Dragonbabyx3.
1800 points, ended October 11, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow
In the beginning, it seemed to be one of the sweetest love poems, it was still that, in a way. It turned dark in the end, a sense of panic rises up when you get to the lines "Then he takes the cushion
places it on her face" Everything came crashing down. It's strangley beautiful but frightful at the same time. I loved the quote prompt you used. Great take on it! Good Luck!
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I like it !!
I think it's very well written and to be honest, I think this is the best you have written so far !
Very original and well done
Keep em coming !
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thanx nonkel
nu nog hope dak er wa punte mee pak
xXx
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*shocked*
that wasn't the ending i imagined in my thougths
what an ending, really didn't see that coming.
This poem was greatly written, really amazing. One of the best I've ever seen from you so far !
The sweetness of the beginning, and darkness at the end,
in one perfect flow...
Great write ihnen
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thanx
I wanted to do something different, and my insane brain started to think about some wrong ways of thinking, the ones I see in class when I have psychiatry
and I love the poem
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