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winter morning

A skinny hunchbacked man framed by the morning sun
Gaunt and despairing frozen to the bone in snow
The sun casting it's fiery gaze across the sky
The green grass hidden by the winter snow
Ready to burst into life in spring

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  • Animarising
    October 20, 2008

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    Love it!

    This is a really lovely description. A very nice piece of verse. I can actually see the 'man' framed by the morning sun- I suspect that it is a bent tree? Well done indeed, and keep writing!


  • The Fun House silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    oh what a bleak image you have painted with your words here...... such a cold and dreary winter's morning.
    But spring is always just around the corner ready to bring life and colour back to the landscape.
    Well done and nicely written.