That year was yours and yours alone.
That year, I treaded lightly in stockinged feet
pink painted toenails dainty but shocking
their colour a shout for the joy at living.
I wound wool around both our hands,
but never got round to knitting that jumper
I was planning for you, with ribs and shiny buttons.
That year was a dance in tune,
linked fingers, we stepped out together,
feet in time, I didn't notice
you spinning further and further,
we became like planets; I was Mercury,
pooling silvery light-
you, Jupiter, a golden giant.
My dreams were spooked, I was always
always chased, never chasing.
I'm not sure what I
We
were running from.
Everyday I saw beauty in your face,
that didn't change.
That year, the air was made from ribbons.
Lost gods were summoned with such
alacrity that they could not help but
appear, to witness this
feast of love.
That year we feasted on love.
I was a Truth you told to everyone.
You were the smiles I wore
when the clouds poured themselves into
my hands.
That year was the year I never wore lipstick
and sent you letters.
I remember, I remember, the summer,
walking in the sunlight,
feeling you on my skin.
I wore Chanel no.5 at Christmas that year.
I cradled your head in my hands and soothed
you to sleep late, so late,
and awoke wrapped up in you,
your hair a second blanket.
That year, I clawed out my eyes for you.
This year, I lost you. One minute
you were walking just behind me;
I was in the middle of a sentence,
talking of something, nothing important
(if it had been, maybe you'd still be there)
and then
when I turned, you had gone,
like an extinguished wish.
This year, I rocked and rocked myself to sleep
and wondered who I would be
without you to tell myself to.
This year heavy as flour sacks,
I collapsed, fell through the floor
of the attic, found myself
an only, a singular.
This year This year This year
is almost through.
A contest entry
- What Went Wrong? (prewrites welcome) by Danna Hobart.
490 points, ended January 12, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sad love Story by tearfilledsunshine.
800 points, ended January 28, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow
I really liked this, normally a non rhyming poem just makes me sleepy, but this captured my attention. good job!!
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A Masterpiece!
There are no words to express how much I admire this poem. It makes me jealous. I am simply in awe. Thank you for entering.
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awesome
very good I have yet to discover the talent of the long poem but you have...Thanks to your comment on my poem too really appreciated that.
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wow! That was an emotional piece. It was amazing!
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Man this bought tears on-you have written a really vibrant, heartfelt painful slice of poetry, and painted the everyday in shades of blue-and love.
You moved me with this.
This year, I rocked and rocked myself to sleep
and wondered who I would be
without you to tell myself to.
Thank you, and peace x
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Oh goodness... what a story, masterfully told. You really know how to take the reader way up to the heights "pink painted toenails dainty but shocking
their colour a shout for the joy at living." and then crash them down into the lows "This year heavy as flour sacks, I collapsed, fell through the floor" Thank you so much for this piece. -
All the tiny details made this one a winner for me. I was touched. I felt the happiness, then I experienced the despair and loss. Well done.
"walking in the sunlight,
feeling you on my skin."
excellent.
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thank you. this poem means alot to me, im glad you liked it.
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