Majestic, elegant and stealthy,
from the golden peaks I observe
my quarry beneath the pine tops
unaware of my vigilance and hunger.
Creeping down the mountain side,
like lightning I strike the weakest,
with claws in neck and teeth in gullet,
bringing the beast quickly to its knees.
My kittens await my victorious return,
spotted and mischievous scamps,
hissing as they tackle the prized feast
My pride runs over as they nurture.
I bask now in the moon’s beaming light,
purring softly, my family huddled closely,
ever so watchful for perils in the darkness,
until tomorrow brings full circle of life again.
Author notes
Cougars are the only cats in the big cat family that can purr. My cougar Goliath sounds like a motor. See him on my homepage!
Option 1- About your favorite pet/animal.
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Comments
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This was very moving. It flowed great. I liked the ending. Cougars are a nice animal. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you!!!
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I deeply enjoyed this piece. I don't get to see too many pieces inspired by animals- and even if they are, they normally are briefly used or its vague.
Here, you took the animal and turned it into poetry.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
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This was a beautiful poem that flowed so well and the rhthm was just perfect. I love stories and poems about animals so your page really caught my eye when i saw all those georgous cats! An excellent piece indeed telling of a mothers loving care and need to provide. Congrats on the bronze you got.
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Surpised you have a cougar, it made for a very unique poem. The piece strikes the right balance between portraying them as both deadly and caring. Thank you for your entry.
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Thankyou for entering
Thankyou for your entry,slightly darker than the other entries I have recieved.Nicely formatted.Judging will take place shortly. Thankyou
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thought you were going somewere else with this from the title. I love you r poem though ver educational
The Positives:
great poem very discriptive
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
My kittens await my victorious return,
spotted and mischievous scamps,
hissing as they tackle the prized feast
My pride runs over as they nurture.
loved how you wrote this
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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Awesome That you have a cougar. I love the poem it has value. Sweet and Sentimental. I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks For Entering.
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Lovely, an overall great write and enjoyable to read. Thank you and good luck in my contest
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first of all really cool you have a cougar, i always loved the animal when i was little, second great job with this poem a dedication to the animal and showed the beauty in both the poem and the animal
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A beautiful composition in tribute to a beautiful animal---Very well written and versed.
Well done & best of luck in the contest!
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I enjoyed reading your peom. I would love to have a big cat for a pet. That would be Sooo cool. Thank you for entering.
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Wow, you have a cougar? I will have to come back to this poem when the contest is over, and the authors are revealed to me so I can see who you are and therefore go to your page and see your cougar;
you described them so vividly here, particularly their movements, excellently done - and i didn't know they were the only big cats that can purr; do lions & tigers not purr?!
Thanks for entering
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Thank you so much for this wonderful poem about the magnificent Cougar. Beautifully written and described. Good luck in the contest.
ValkyrieNightWeaver
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You know, it's funny, I have been feeling called to the Cougar as my totem animal. Great poem, I would love to write like you.
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Again it is great when you can incorporate your passion into your writing. You do well with your poetry when you do, for it comes from your heart and soul. This is a very nice piece with great description.
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I like this poem about the cougar. We have had cougar sitings in my state for decades but never seen by a biologist so they didnt count. Now fish and game is saying the eastern cougar is back, but is an escapee. However, I know of sitings every 5 or 6 years back to the late 40s. I dont have a high opinion of biologists.
Great job.
Mike
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did not know that about cougars. thanks for sharing. ur pics are great. lol
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wow
so amazing that you have that real close kinship with such a beautiful but very dangerous animal..nice write my friend!
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I loved this poem . . . it it a gorgeous write. The descriptions are great, I especially liked "My kittens await my victorious return,
spotted and mischievous scamps." I really enjoyed this. Well done
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