In dreams of silver lights, canescence thrives,
as floating visions do butterfly dance.
A girl in deepest sleep, gently revives
from end of solar day's eternal trance.
In oneness, she can connect as beings do
to astral life that flies through starry nights.
For Luna, moonlit nymph, is born anew
to wonders that begin with earthly sights
As water reflects true her call of wild,
This carefree naiad of dark laughs and plays
as brightened soul that lives in loving child,
with dawn of morning's light ends frisky ways.
She turns down, dims the light of countless stars
to give back to us what is truly ours.
Author notes
Option #1
A contest entry
- Paint your words in darkness.. by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
550 points, ended October 16, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love it!
That is my all time favorite critique. -
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lol all it was is a rose, i couldn't think of what else to put or what to say for it
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Love this...
Beautifully penned narrative, full of mystery & enchantment with a pretty rhyme scheme in and of itself...
Keep up the good work...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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very nice poem, the solar system reflects so much on the moon and her activities, thank you for sharing this with ke, as it is very creativw
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Luna
"She turns down, dims the light of countless stars
to give back to us what is truly ours. "
That's what got it for me!
Your imagery is great, and it flows easily awesome.
Emotions are profound, and brings my thoughts to stary nights that are soo damn beautiful and fun!!!!
As always beautiful writting!!!
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thank you
THE STARS ARE SHINING ON YOU
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Excellent!
The visualization of this gorgeous lady leads me to believe you think of her quite often. The picture is amazing at the top and allures the readers attention to go further, and your descriptions of luna are amazingly astounding, and quite breath takingly exquisite! Again, my favorite part was the ending couplet. I admire our uncanny ability to write, and write so damn well! Now if you'll excuse me! Luna, wait there, i'm coming to you girl!!!! hahaha Daddys got a pair of undies he wants you to try on!
lol, once again, bravo mate, simply stunning and captivating. Truly the best i've witnessed on this site so far in my four years of being with it. I'm a huge fan of rhyme, and you've certainly quenched my thirst! Bravo! 
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Stunning
I love the feel the imagery and the thoughts
Thank you for your beautiful entry
Best wishes
Julie
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This is beautiful, you didn't need the pic for this...your words painted it perfectly.
Good luck with this in the conest
Love ~sweetness~ xxx
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Thanks onesugar
This is my evolution in progress. As you can see, I'm changing and growing, also. Thanks for the great comment. I always appreciate your reads, mate!
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Your imagination is great and loved the flow! Good luck in the contest
As water reflects true her call of wild,
This carefree naiad of dark laughs and plays
as brightened soul that lives in loving child,
with dawn of morning's light ends frisky ways.
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I like how you put She turns down, dims the light of countless stars to give back to us what is truly ours.
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I like it
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I loved this...tender flow and imagery...
pulls us in..and we bask in it's purity!
loved it!
ears/Seattle
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Thank you, Ears!
This is my first write in a while. Thank you for reading it.
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This is really beautiful! The meter and rhyme are right on, which makes the read spectacular. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you!
I appreaciate you kind read. It put a smile on my morning face.
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