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My Answer

~*~

 

' A painting come to life '

appeared ahead
while trying to lose myself
driving along this country road.

It began to snow
a quietness
fell over all
a blanket of purity.

Relishing in the beauty
I'd missed for long now
I find myself
driving toward what
was once my home.

The snow
fell early this year
the trees still covered
with Autumns colors
bright oranges, yellows
leaves in many stages.

Up ahead of me
a fork in the road
reminding me
why I wanted to go home.

I wanted to clear my mind
of all my problems
I needed

some new found strength.

Suddenly...

a deer darts before me
as I approach the fork
could I stop to avoid it
road was slippery?

That was the last thing
I remembered!


All went dark
not a sound.

What had happened,
was I still alive?

I felt extremely cold
unable to move
my face wet
from blood.

Darkness surrounded me...
I saw my past....
I must be dead....
I wondered if anyone would care?

My love and I
had quarreled

over something stupid.

We were strolling
in the park
discussing wedding plans
unable to agree upon a date.

I wanted the summer
she wanted the Autumn.

She loved
the color of crimson most
like that of a leaf
that appears in the fall.

I awoke to sirens
people around me
how I survived
no-one knew.

Upon my chest
they found my hand
grasping gently
a crimson colored leaf!

As I recovered
at the hospital
I knew
all that mattered
was us together.

The next fall
at that same fork
we said our vows
before all.

What better place
to start life anew
than where life
had almost ended.

 

~*~

Author notes

number 7 Color; Crimson

Random Object; Fork

Song; Master of Puppets by Apocalyptica

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  • Hikari Phoenix
    November 3, 2008
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    I like this alot, it could have been more romantic and held more anguish on the loss emotions but still it brings images in to the mind and makes one think of life. I liked it and enjoyed the story behind it, it held a meaning like small matters don't really deserve us to have quarreles over them and we should rather focus on the big and important things.
    Nicely penned!

    ~Noor


  • rite gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Apocalyptica provides the proper audio background for these thoughts. Strings that vibrate feelings hidden deep, allowing them to surface after we chose.


  • CatQueen248
    October 8, 2008
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    This was sort of a romantic poem. You should never fight over such petty things because you never know what may happen the next day and you'll never be able to say sorry or that you forgive that person. Great write and good luck in the contest. Btw was this a true story?


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 8, 2008

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    This is truly beautiful!! You did a very amazing job writing this piece!! I love it!! This is so brilliant!! You are incredible!!