Like a leaf in the cosmic wind
under clouds that hold no rain
naked in watchful eyes of God
set to drift, on astral plane.
With each, incarnation lived
the closer to God I’ll dwell
far away from the lower planes
and the open gates of Hell.
A few more suits of skin to wear
with life lessons to be learned
blinded to the rapture of God
until each suit is burned.
Life is suffering, my time on earth
I’m chilled, in the skin of clothes.
I long for warmth, of death my birth
when my soul blooms like a rose.
Author notes
Quote: Nakedness is the fearless journey of soul...Unknown
Quote: A new species is arising on the planet. It is arising now, and you are it.
This quote I took from Eckhart Tolle's book, A New Earth
I truly believe the next evolutionary step for our species is the knitting of the right and left hemispheres of the brain. Which will set the stage for humanity to "Ascend" to a higher plane of existance, where we can shed these clothes of skin.
5 As free as a butterfly just out of its cocoon
Help Me Feel Again
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A contest entry
- Journeys of the mind, the transformation by Dark Otter.
530 points, ended November 3, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Word Prompt by Thor-201.
700 points, ended January 1, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
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850 points, ended March 3, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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460 points, ended April 23, 12 entries
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Comments
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FYI the corpus callosum unites the right and left sides of the brain. Left brain- right brain lateralization theories are now not scientifically valid since we know that both sides of the brain work equally with the exception of the Broca's and Wernike's areas which is the language loop found on the left side of the brain for 90% of rightys and 70% of leftys.
But beside that - I really like how you put this poem together. It was very elegant. I also like the picture you used.
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Very well penned...
as evidenced by the many trophies!
Thanks for entering ....Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on!
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Those hemispheres of the brain house the gateway between spirit and Earth. we arrive through it when we enter the wonmb around 6 weeks and we leave through it when we die. A really good write.
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It's strange to see a nudist ascending into the light of Divinity. But it makes for a beautiful poetic picture. This is lovely writing.
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excellent
i love the timbre of meaning in your piece, well done and thankyou for entering!
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This is a great poem and it describes well the dream that I had last night of the other planet, Atlantis, and their inhabitants of old fashioned talking objects...I have weird symbolic dreams. I was in the process of 'running away' when I found out my mom had cancer, then I found a treasure map of the island and decided to go to Atlantis. There, I was greeted by talking accordions. Of course it most just speaks to me of the journey of finding one's spiritual path...despite complications. Great read~ PEACE
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Hello there,
Such a lovely write..
Well, You have titled the poem very apt. I liked this one a lot
Title - 9.2/10
This prewrite is fitting the prompt very well... besides, the picture is very good. I liked it. I liked theme as well.
Theme - 9/10
Excellent choice of words, brilliant flow and lofty images. No wonder you won gold for it.
Diction - 9.5/10
On the whole, you have done a brilliant job here....
Presentation - 9.2/10
You are creative, no second thought.
Creativity - 9/10
TOTAL - 45.9/50
Cool! Lovely score. All the best in the contest.
Love and regards
Kiddy
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great write. I was at first taken by the graphic and then of course went to the poem from there. congrats on your previous trophies and thank you for entering
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Well, that is a very interesting concept.
Your poem is lovely as well. Thank you for entering my contest.
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This is really good. I like your interpretation of the prompt. Thank you for entering, best of luck in the contest.
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I just adore the picture and your poem goes so well with both it and the prompt. Thank you for taking time to post.
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A very strong entry!
I love life as a suit of clothes that we shed over and over again. Plus, I really love the picture. It fits the prompt and shares in how I understand things.
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so profound, best of luck
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"my soul blooms like a rose". I have to say it sounds like fun though that doesn't sound spiritual enough.
It would be a really nice route to go, further from hell, as you say. An enjoyable write. Maybe if we shed those clothes of skin, I won't have arthritis or worry about my weight. -
Bravo, I feel the same but unable to put words to this feeling I thought maybe someone else could.
and you have,
beautifully done
I really love the quote in your AN
YOUR LAST LINE IS PRECIOUS
such a pleasure to read
thank you for your entry
God bless you...
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Humm..it seems that you are opening the book of the sacred work by the God while revealing the secrets of HIS creations..I liked this verse which is rare in terms of its immages..well done...
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This is a beautiful piece! What an excellent and creative take on the prompt! Meter and rhyme are right on, which makes for a spectacular read. Good luck in the contest!
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