it was just a simple smile,
and not that cute stare,
nor that soft hand that I was holding for awhile,
but maybe because of that baritone voice that made me aware,
I am already inhaling your scent,
giving me another surprise,
enough for me to know that more than a minute was spent,
and that another feeling would soon arise...
A contest entry
- Quickie: Young Love by Rizzie.
400 points, ended October 19, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GOLD DIGGERS ONLY (just for losers) by tarcus.
950 points, ended April 8, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i would love to hear it from you...
Comments
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Nice thoughts good luck if they are for real...
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baritone voice
that made the piece sensual, added more to it, the silent languanges such as the cute stare and a simple smile
which speaks louder volumes too
Congrats on the Silver -
such a pretty poem :] nice write
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A tender and beautiful write... the magic of discovery that something more exists when we let our emotions move beyond the artificial shells we hide in... Well done.
Ken
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