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“Nobody’s Home”

Nobody’s Home 8.10.08

I often wonder to myself,
Where is she?
Where has she gone?
I look for her,
Here, there and everywhere…
I look inside myself and feel bare,
I know others out there do deeply care,
The struggle each day,
She fights to find herself,
And no, she wasn’t left on the shelf,
She has a loving husband and loving children,
So why does she feel she is on the rim?
Her home feels so cold,
To the point of being bold!
One day I truly pray she finds herself,
And doesn’t feel this emptiness of doom,
With the sense of nobody’s home!
Let the warmth come back inside her,
Let her feel that other people do care,
So she can be able to start to share,
Maybe a month, maybe two,
Down the line,
And without any frown,
Will be the day she will find,
Inner love, inner peace,
Warmth and love from her family,
And it won’t be that nobody is home,
It will be that everyone is there,
And things are meant to be as they are!

Namaste Selfexpressive.  “Nobody’s Home” – Avril Lavigne

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  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    This poem is brilliant.

    I'm so glad you took the song's idea and explored it so intensely. I love the way you kind of change between free-verse and rhyming.. so subtly that i barely noticed The story of this poem is very emotional and you captured that really well through your writing, particularly the way your rhyme kind of makes bitter irony of the misery of the lady.

    "Here, there and everywhere…
    I look inside myself and feel bare,"

    -- those lines in particular got under my skin.
    The first makes me think of some nursery rhyme (though i cant figure out which one) and this leads to a false sense of possible happiness... which is then crushed by the next line.

    I'm not sure that you actually intended to do that exactly... but that's just my personal response. =)

    Sorry if i bored you with this dreadfully long comment but thank you for your much appreciated entry and best of luck in my contest


    • Selfexpressive
      October 11, 2008
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      Thanks very much for your comment, I have only just discovered this is how to reply to you also lol... thank you also for wishing me luck in your contest, I really enjoyed doing this poem,