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A Chance To See You Crying

You're a puzzle that I was thinking for such a long time,
how could I put all the right pieces together into a right place,
but in time, I haven't completed the picture of you that I am wanting for so long.

I am not a puzzle in your eyes and a very much disgrace,
you may see me crying now because of letting go of me,
as I broke into pieces right in front of your despicable gaze,
and I waited for your response to fix me up and heal me again,
unfortunately, you didn't move a hand or even take a step towards me.

Time passes as I survived your passive torture,
and saw each other again,
A sly smile was found etched on my face,
I am walking towards you, as if asking your return.

You said yes with such glee,
and on that time, I saw the puzzle that I WAS wanting to be whole came to life,
I held you in my arms, acting like I'll forever hold on to you,
but then You're no longer a puzzle to me,
but something so vulnerable that I would love to break.

Bewilderment arose in front of you,
as you saw me starting to leave,
oh, I could hear your sweet pleas, the irritating grasp of your hands into my legs,
Beg more, and how it is hard for me not to laugh,
a sullen face, something that I would want to see,
Cause I know, I'll make a move,
to take all the chances to see you crying.

Author notes

5. “Trade places with me, that’s all I am asking. You think you are “big man on campus” don’t you? Well, just wait a couple hours. You haven’t seen fear until you meet up with what’s about to come our way. Then we’ll see what kind of man you really are - phony tough or crazy brave.”

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    Great take on the prompt
    Your emotions came across as almost a threat
    Very well penned