Come little sis, let’s get us to the ball;
The mood it could be
mauve,
the tempo
sarabande.
But no,
that’s not the way it works at all.
The key won’t turn,
the glove is on the other hand.
Author notes
Take the words for what they are, or click on the contest link to see the picture prompt and the artist credit.
I have been told to credit the artist, even though I have not used the picture. Very well. Jealousy by manips-of-artist2
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 22 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended October 13, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This really set a great mood, and shows how brevity can work so well. Very well penned, thanks for entering and good luck
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Glad you like it. Shame the judges don't.
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It's all objective
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Yep
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Love that second line!!! Set a great atmosphere!
Really great take that shows the power of brevity.
Oh and thanks for crediting the artist lol.. always nice to do so when someone's work has inspired a write
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Please credit artist in your AN, thanks
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I didn't use the picture with my poem, so there was no need to credit the artist.
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I realise that, but the rules clearly state to credit artist as all writes are inspired by the work
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I will do so, but under polite protest.
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Thank you
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I think your words (although they stand alone perfectly) really give a kind of weird coherence to the picture prompt. Very well done.
Bill
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wonderful job with this, M
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{happy little sigh}
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This is very, very interesting, brilliant in fact. I chose to study it without the picture first. Make my judgments then look at the picture. What a shock. I think I have a good idea what this means, and it goes perfectly with the picture. Bravo.
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If you got close to the idea of a dissociative mind, then you got close to what I was trying to portray.
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Disassociative wha... I don't understand because I have ADH.. do you like bicycles or blast furnaces?
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Yes.
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I read your poem then I looked at the beautiful picture then read the poem again. You did do a wonderful job of portraying the prompt. I then took the poem personally and wondered if you were mad at me.
Love,
Amera♥
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Jings, no, Sis! Not that I would tell you if I was, anyway.
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Great stuff, I have still to decide where to take this purple masterpiece, seeing it tackled by the best can only help me see into the picture.
Thank-you and have the usual handful of capital letters and rodents!
NB.NBB.GIF
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Oooh eck wasn't expecting this from the title - like all good divas you are full of surprises. Love the images this is giving me.
Les lapins de danse iront à la boule
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Ahem... I think you mean "au bal", Jem.
Unless the three bunnies are going to play pétanque!
Thank you for the "diva"
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ma Français n'est pas aussi bonne qu'elle était... a game of petanque sounds good though. Think I still got a set somewhere.
Do 'divas' play petanque???? Oh me oh mama what a picture I can do with that!!!! Throws the writing pad away for the night!
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