Static disruption
a crackling distraction
Is that my thoughts?
or are you on the other end?
I have been on hold
for far too long.
speak up, your fading fast
my minutes are running out
I have no more change
and I am getting cold
standing here alone
raindrops on the phone booth
then the line goes dead
I stand there for a long time
Trying to figure out
if the rain is coming in
or if I am crying
Then I see your face
on the other side of the glass
and feel your warm embrace.
A contest entry
- Share your love by Bean Sidhe.
600 points, ended October 11, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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very nice... the reader can share the emotions, low the high, and a smile...very well done...PK
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This is lovely, I felt the sadness when the line went dead and I wondered how it would end. I am very glad it was happily. Best to you dear Bandit
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Aww!
This is beautiful!
I love it.
Such a simple poem, but it's filled with emotion and excellent description. I love this stanza :
Trying to figure out
if the rain is coming in
or if I am crying
So sad,
but a happy ending.
I like happy endings ^.^
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ElectricBloom
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