Vivid scenes envelope my thoughts
Surrounding his inevitable demise
With haste I must determine his fate
His breathing corpse is firmly bound
His awakening is ever close
My decision is now at hand
His torment will become legend
On the lips who speak his name
Ne’er before has this town known
The horrors I will bring
He is honored as my victim
His death will be renowned
Visions of his crimson blood
Will be etched in innocent minds
Terror will devour all hope
As his bloodshed devours my rage
The scent burning flesh
Engulfing my nostrils
Quickening my thoughts
As flames lick against his skin
His screams are the music
That fills my soul with joy
The flames only a taste
Of the torment to follow
His skin charred and still he breathes
Unable to escape his living hell
Piece by piece I shred his skin
His crimson blood flowing
Heart racing beneath his ribs
Nerves glimmering against his spine
Tears of blood shower his cheeks
His prayer for release not answered
My torment is not complete
A final laugh is all he sees
As I thrust my hand into his chest
His beating heart within my grasp
A twist, a scream, my final trophy
© 2008 Gerald W. Locke Jr.
Author notes
In the Contest: "As Dark As It Gets" by Eclecta I believe the winning entry should be "The Pastor (Extreme Adult Content)"
In a list
A contest entry
- Title/Quote Prompt by Harlequin Dance.
600 points, ended October 25, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Convince Me to Stay on Allpoetry! by crosscountry07.
750 points, ended November 10, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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im not sure if the picture, or the poem scares me the most.i think i have to say, the picture is more creepy, and the poem is gruesome. i love the detail in it though.
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Dude...that CREEPS ME OUT! Nice! I like how you didn't soften up for the reader, you were brutal. That's good. The last line I swear it gave me goosebumps
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This was incredible! I could picture everything happening, a sickening tale of conquest! Beautifully done! Can I say beautifully with such a dark write? I think I can. Thank you for entering and GOOD LUCK in my contest! -Liz
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Dark, demonic, deadly. A strong piece with the perfect amount of gruesome and darkness. Nicely penned! Good luck with the contest!
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Wow.....A very descriptive piece of writing here.....I hope to read more of your work....
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Yeah...!!
Nice bit of killing going on in this piece. Nothing better than ripping the heart out of a helpless soul, after a good session!!
Definitely worthy of a trophy in the contest: As Dark As It Get...
Well you know I have entered The Pastor in this contest, but I have also entered one called:
The Hitchhiker: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3763574
Have a look at that one.
Good luck in the contest.
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Ha ha, wonderful.
I love: 'Tears of blood shower his cheeks'
Awesome.
Thanks for entering.
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very vivid imagery with an overall sadistic theme....this was brutal and unforgiving....matching an emotion such as pleasure/enjoyment with a brutal act that these emotions aren't normal associated with....I believe you are a new member to the group, so Welcome! I hope to be reading more of your stuff and hearing some of your input soon!
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imagery was astounding...well done!
ears/Seattle
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Holy crap
This was an amazing piece
Definitely captivating
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FREAKING AMAZING WRITE! And that is all I can say! Loved it! Thank you for sharing this with me
Well done and good luck to you in both the concerts!
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Title Prompt: Crimson in Malice
Take it where you will.
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