People have
Said often before,
There's a mountain in me.
With it's peaks and valleys,
It is as characteristic as I am.
It's strong, and can withstand much.
It's situated in my core-
But every mountain has it's breaking point.
People walk up this mountain everyday.
Some in an organized route,
Others go alone.
Most go the distance,
They take whatever
gets thrown at
them,
And they survive.
Some give up after a little rain.
Will you...?
Author notes
Did you like how the poem itself is a mountain?
(Well, sideways...)
My prompt- Soul Mountain. Hope it worked for you...
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Does it resonate with you?
Comments
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Good work here
So true but often we dont know until we have been tested through time
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Wow, love this poem! Especially the question at the end, how it trails off as if uncertain about the reader. Great job
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hey this is good huni goodluck and keep up your good work :-)
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Very interesting analogy, littlefish is right. This does seem different for you. I like the way to attacked the prompt though and how you challenged the reader at the end. Nice, although I wonder if you might be able to expound on this even more. It seems like there is more to be made of this topic
Just a thought, Much love, Kelly
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This is different for you isn't it,it has a certain something about it though I cant put my finger on it for me it echoes some kind of vulnerability, of being a little unsure, perhaps because it reminds me of some one I love very much who sees the world through different eyes, and has a thing for number, I realy like it good write littlefishone
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Title Prompt: Soul Mountain
Take it where you will.
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