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((These)(People))

You (may) think I am p.i.o.u.s...
I have -no- specific agenda.

The *idea* of fulfilling a PurPose
  |r|e|s|t|r|i|c|t|s| me to one _item_...
I have no list.

I live
    day
        by
          day,
          and I love it that way.

There many p*e*o*p*l*e* who love me,
And I love them in
                return...
     
   
It is ((these)(people)) who *inspire me.

If I had to c h o o s e ONE PurPose,
It would be to -live- for these people,
To .::help::. them.
To _l_o_v_e_ them.

Everybody *needs* someone....

I ((want)) to be that someone.

Author notes

This is a new poem...

Written (or tried) Dirty Pretty style.
If ya don't like it, lemme know, and I'll try something else....

In a list

A contest entry

Does it resonate with you?

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Comments

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  • Loveberry
    March 5
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    Love it, once again. My feelings ->exactly<-


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    February 17
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    Aw I love this. I think everyone wants to be that [someone] for others.


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    October 25, 2008

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    A Very deeply written poem. =] Excellent work. Thank you for your entry and good luck.

    x-Pretty-Odd-x <333


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    I live day by day and I love it that way.
    me too
    I love compassion in this write and the unselfishnish
    this is the true meaning of love
    and sooo creative
    excellent my friend
    God bless you...


  • Scion
    October 9, 2008

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    Oh, this resonates.. it resonates as a true artist. your a magician with words. The appearance of this poem is quite stunning, and the effects quite spectacular. You state your purpose well and with intent. Your other poem says a similar thing, but this is done in a much different way (as to which I realize this is for the prompt as the other is the PreWrite, I am well aware). You really show me who you are and what you are all about at the beginning of this poem... towards the end you start to Tell rather than Show, but you do it all with clarity and vision, choosing the right words at the right time. I sense a dichotomy in you, but one side is definitely clairvoyant, that's for true. you know people, and I think (a characteristic that a lot of people lack), that you allow others to know YOU. wow, i got out a lot from this didn't I?

    Score:
    R-9
    T-8.7
    TH-8.7
    S-8.8
    U-9
    G-8.5
    Ttl-52.7


    • Walking Oxymoron gold member
      October 9, 2008
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      dichotomy? Oooh, nice word! Well, refer to my name!!
      Yeah, I allow people to know me, but only the parts I want them to know. (But maybe this is true in all of us??)

      That's for taking the time to write so much on my entry...
      I'm pleased you liked it, especially as you appeared to think the other was so run of the mill...

      However, I find it hard to choose the best of your own work! Who am I to judge the best of my work when I'm not the person to read it? I don't know what others will think...what they consider to be the best, I guess it depends on what you are looking for!

      Anyway, thanks you very much!

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