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Flying

My darling,
I am flying
But do you fly next to me?
I sure hope so
Because you created this monster

I am addicted
To this drug
But why?
Maybe I am just addicted to your love
And will do anything to get it
Even if it kills me

You made it look so easy
And I followed your lead without hesitate 

Though the taste of love dies
My tongue will always crave more
And while your dry lips move away
I cant help but search for what I want


I always fly alone

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Sydney
DancingWings

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  • Nakatrea
    January 7
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    It was very much so wonderful. Perhaps try not to repeat he word drug so much -I'm picky but its a personal write. As for intense criticism i keep it light for the personal stuff since write it at the spur of the moment just to get it out of the way.

    Addicted to love... yup. but its the idea I get addicted to - which never works out in the end.

  • Xx-Erin-xX
    December 16, 2008

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    Great write! I loved it. It would be easier for me to say some of this if I actually had a boyfriend.

    "I am addicted
    To this drug
    But why?
    Maybe I am just addicted to your love
    And will do anything to get it
    Even if it kills me"

    Then again, the boyfriend might end up being the drug. I also hope I don't get into a relationship and then realize this is true:

    "Baby,
    Because of you
    I am addicted
    Always flying in the sky

    But now I know
    I don't need you
    To fly next to me
    For I am more addicted to this drug
    Then I am to your love

    I fly alone"

    Keep writting.


  • Bella Cullen
    November 22, 2008

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    awww...this is...wow! i really loved this poem. there is so much feeling to it. my fav. parts:

    Baby,
    Because of you
    I am addicted
    Always flying in the sky

    But now I know
    I don't need you
    To fly next to me
    For I am more addicted to this drug
    Then I am to your love

    i love it! there are no words that can exspress the way a feel right now.


  • No longer in use
    October 17, 2008

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    This is quite sad. I have nothing else to say but that. This is a wonderful write. Quite excellent! Beautiful imagery. I like it what you have done. Nicely done.


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 15, 2008
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    Very good

    A good write indeed. Deserving


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    SO SAD!!!!!

    I understand drugs make one do things they would not normally do but I for one have never taken any illegal drugs or ever intend to. I prefer being my own self whether it be for better or worse. Sometime being on drugs can take one feelings away from the one they love and that is truly a terrible shame. Wonderful write to bring out how one can be affected.


  • Kept As A Shadow
    October 8, 2008

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    i don't exactly get this...only the drug part

    there it was hard but happy??? i commented on not a stupid hero one!! lol but its good...too good...lol j


  • AnonymouslyKnown
    October 7, 2008
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    ver good sydney. it's kendall. a bit cheesey in th middle but overall was pretty good.

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