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Intuition

Missing image

facing opposition
envy dangles
from threatening threads,

desire held secluded
hidden under covet of want,
sees only window of choice,

I deny surrender
while emotions wind taut
yielding solely to instinct,

intuition supports virtue
within sincerity's commitment
casting lifeless illusion aside.

 

 

 

Author notes

Jealousy by manips-of-artist2
(possibly a bit abstract..but I know what I mean lol )

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  • DolceVito gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Good job

    This was one of those prompts that gave me writer's block when the contest was first posted...evidently you didn't have the same problem. Deserving and
    Vito


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      October 27, 2008
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      Thank you. Just kick your muse a time or 3..keep looking deeply at the prompt and words will come hehe


  • Rclane gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Wonderful take on the prompt and so worth the Silver.....I love this from first word to last very nicely done.


  • penman gold member
    October 17, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well done. Congratulations on the silver. It was very well deserved.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 12, 2008
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    excellent~

    Love the imagery and the metaphors in this one....
    Envy dangles from threathing threads
    Desire held secluded
    I deny surrender
    Excellent as alway
    Best of luck in the contest
    I would love a direct link to this persons pic..tried to find one on the previous one at deviant art..said no page found
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    Excellent!! I think you've captured the kind of feel I had from the picture.. of envy and slight threat! Wonderful job!


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you for silver and for hosting another contest with these great pics! I love em!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    A beautifully penned piece with some neat phrasing. I especially like 'threatening threads' and 'lifeless illusion' Wonderful alliteration. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 9, 2008

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    Nice job, Linda. I especially liked the lines:

    I deny surrender
    while emotions wind taut
    yielding solely to instinct

    Mike


  • jasminerose
    October 8, 2008

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    Oh I just love this...intuition supports virtue
    within sincerity's commitment
    casting lifeless illusion aside.
    Nicely done, the whole poem is just wonderful and it is not that abstract as it dangles us to delve into it deeper between the lines
    Excellent!!!
    Linda


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Wonderful indeed! You caught the essence on this picture wonderfully and the ending was perfect!
    All the best with this
    Gaylene


  • KayJay
    October 7, 2008

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    Linda... you never cease to amaze me. This is a wonderful write full of strong images and strong prose... Well done, young lady
    Ken


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 7, 2008
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    oh yes, i should have caught it from this side. best of luck

    ♥
    whisper

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