Hunting down the reason of existence
Exploring this mind so bliss with ignorance
Writing words to express pain and feelings
With regrets that I have sadly endeavored
Without realization of my own doing
These poems are all self-proving
Of a meaningless life with no end
I wonder how all of this came to begin
But people with the efforts to read and filled with desires
All take a peek within these works, which inspires
It gives them hope, how I really don’t know
And the urge to write seems to grow and grow
But still I walk blindly, towards an empty dream
My inspirations still growing, ripping the stretched out seams
For my lack of wanting to live or to love again
Keeps me writing, with people making their own connections
A contest entry
- Best Poems Ever by Scion.
900 points, ended October 27, 2008, 29 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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it does give hope and a feeling, a connection maybe,
in our daily life we don't really express our feelings freely and through writing we are able to do this and at times relate to others where in our day to day life we don't or maybe we don't try.
we write without fear
but in our life there is hesitation because of fear
this is really very beautiful
it clearly shows the heart of a poet
God luck in the contest
God bless you my friend...
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I like this because it's not what I was expecting. I like this because it takes an honest and more pessimistic outlook (that I think most of us share). I like this because it's hopeful, though not hopeful to you as the title would suggest. It is hopeful to others. They make their connections as you struggle to understand. What a difficult task on as you "walk blindly". Overall, the theme is clear, the structure is solid and, though it is not fully developed and executed, you give rhyming a try. A lot of effort and thought obviously went into this. I thank you. Cheers.
oh, and for Stanza 4, line 2: it should be "seams"
Scoring:
Rules-9
Title-8.5
Theme-8.8
Structure-8.5
Uniqueness-8.9
Grammar-8.7
Total-52.4
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thank you for catching that mistake. though i do have to say i threw it together in a couple of minutes. but thank you for the feedback.
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