A smile
on a face previously bleak
Hope
in the eyes of the heretofore weak
Love
in the heart of the unlovable
Peace
in the life of the always unstable
Is it simply too much to ask
to do some good before I've passed?
Author notes
Yeah. . . Pretty much
A contest entry
- Best Poems Ever by Scion.
900 points, ended October 27, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Short, sweet, and to the point? Or not?
Comments
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that's sweet luv
"Short, sweet and to the point" so much for me trying to be original eh?
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Umm, yeah. Ditto what you said, "Short, sweet, and to the point." I liked the brevity and the familiarity of themes. what can we hope for, more than this? Things I liked: the structure and overall look to the poem (your last entry was not shabby either ), the rather quaint rhyme scheme, and it's alltogetherness.
Cheers.
My Score:
R-9
T-8.3
Th-8.7
S-9
U-8.7
G-8.5
Ttl-52.2 -
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Thanks for taking the time to write such a kind comment : ) Long comments are so great to get, especially nice ones. . . Yeah. Thanks. I'm glad you liked it!
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