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Heartbreak

Another day where I'm thinking about you
I try to build a wall but you still get through
Why can't I just close my eyes and everything will be okay
I may be fine for a couple of hours but I know it shall be a repeat the next day
A wine glass fell off a table
Can you hear the delicacy shatter?
Do you do feel the pain?
Did you think it would never matter?
It takes a while to fix the shame
of falling for you and falling for your game
but it's a lesson taught in life that nothing ever remains the same
Even though there is sunlight
There is always a patch of rain

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  • WednesdayJade
    October 13, 2008

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    This is really good writing.
    It flows really well and also expresses your feelings and tells a story beautifully.
    I love the reference to the wine glass... really good
    x x x