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The Replacement

 

 

 

 

Anger and frustration fills my heart,

as this new doll floats beside me.

A new replacement for my castle,

the one that I built years before.

 

I have guarded it with my life,

only to find that I am no longer wanted.

If I could just wind myself up,

I could make a stand against them.

 

To let them know that there is,

so much more to me than they see.

I am so much more beautiful,

and taller than she will ever be.

 

There is no way that I am leaving here!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Jealousy by manips-of-artist2
No more than 100 Words

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    Ahh yes, to feel you are being replaced is such a terrible feeling!!! You've got her fear across well here! Excellent take!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Excellent take, such sorrow laced throughout. To be cast aside for some new model (so to speak) is indeed sad. You have portrayed the emotions beautifully. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • KayJay
    October 7, 2008

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    LOL - What a creative take! Jeremy - you've taken this "pretty picture" and totally changed the dynamic. A truely inspired write! Well done and all the best...
    Ken