There is nothing in this sea to tempt an island. No,
no lonely reef or rock-pierced seabed, no bump
in the endless smooth of waves, the peace of
drifting pieces, places, names & faces & tapestries
strung of water. There
are no memories here; no gulls to fall away in
the shattered glare of sunset, no east-west-north
to point a distance: there is no else. This
is everything: watch it flow. Watch it meld & melt
& turn within turning, churning, no forgetting because
there is no now. No separation between thens, time
stacked onto time like piles of obsidian sand, each grain
the same. No unique. No concept
of ‘this is not that,’ of ‘I am not you’ because there is
no you, no I, we are all & none & everything simultaneously
until
this is everything.
watch it leave.
Author notes
Thankyou, Blkwidow.
- We have the right to make you write in any form/style/type of poetry there is on this planet. We will literally murder ourselves sometimes by trying to find even at least one bizarre form. But, then again, you may have easy things too. Or maybe not. You never know.
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- We have the right to eliminate as many people as we want. We may not eliminate anyone until like the second last round. Or we may eliminate almost everyone in the first round and have the contest super short. Again, you never know!
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I, Macey, agree that I have read these terms of use and will hereby abide by the law.
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A contest entry
- prose contest. by iverbthenoun.
875 points, ended November 1, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - UNPLANNED: as unexpected as you [preliminary round] by Never Fall in Love.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - think you should be on my favorites? let me know why. by stasis.
400 points, ended April 25, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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an amazing poem; love the form, loved every word of it; thank you for opening my reading experience to this!
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Well, my young friend
I'd say that you have an existentialist leaning, expressed through fine lines of poetry, unpretentious all.
The emblem of the seagull is a bright decision. You must have discovered your title in an unplanned moment.
Congratulations, Jenny.
Ron.
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Jen, you are an incredible writer with a unique style, and I am truly looking forward to competing with you. Congrulations on your trophy.
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ack, your new username still surprises me! (it /is/ tyler, right?)
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haha yeah, this is the same tyler -- just a bit more mature and secure.
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Heres another 3 claps.
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I want you to die.
Ok. well. This has to be THE (note caps) most freakin devilish piece I have read on this site. I hate (and hate is a strong word) the way you have with words. It's just so... so enticing. This poem made me melt into something unknown, that one day, scientists will discover and will name: Ditt0's greed.
Ok. Time to compliment you some more.
I think (and although I know my thoughts should be ignored by a poet such as yourself, I will utter them anyway) that this piece has perfect flow and structure. Your language creates the placid, serene image that I assume was your initial intension. The way the words flow through the readers mouth is like that of the picture you painted. Soft and gentle.
Your introduction and conclusion are filled with intense subtleties that anchor the reader to the piece. Every word and concept is crucial. There is nothing lacking and no blathering onwards. This piece is unique and utterly riveting, and I truly admire it and you as a poet.
This is not the last you've seen of me, Macey Muse.
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yes yes yes.
excellent.
You're in.
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/UNPLANNED%20as%20unexpected%20as%20you
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YES!!
You melted me. This was real.
The poetic tone was brilliant and like nothing I've ever heard.
Please wait for Chandni
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i really like this. there is a sense of nothingness; a sense of poignance that i really liked about your piece. thanks for your entry. good luck
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I am flattered. Over the years, there have been certain pieces I write that you take to.
It's nice to see, in poetic response, what touches others the most. In this case, it seems the isolation and the continious nature and circle of all things.
And while it was a poetic reflection, it holds its own. Being your take and mind. The way light hits a prism and spreads into seperate colors.
I enjoyed it, and the final line was a nice touch.
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Thank you. I just wish my mind had more to say, these days.
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Superb
'tis a very fine write, indeed. You expressed your ideas quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Oh. This is a pretty cool poem that you have going on here. I really like this. This is prose, right? I liked how you led one line down into the next one. So it was almost like it was continous but it had some space to breathe too. I'm sure I don't get all the things that you were saying in this but I get the general idea and it leaves it open for me to interpert it, so that lots of people can relate to it in their own way. I thought you did a really great job expressing yourself here.
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