Gravity weighs me down,
Pulled by the heart,
This earth,
How, this is tough love,
Many leasons.
I learn,
Give me an inch,
I take a mile,
Cover it,
Human law,
Guile..inside my head,
Makes it seem right,
None can see but you,
The one I intrust my life,
So here I am. A child, blank and new,
Scars remind me what you can see through,
Fear is gone, loneliness my clue,
Clarity's on its way...
To eventually run me through,
I stand,
stare it in the eyes,
take it as it comes,
I'm not hungry anymore,
No more searching
I stand patient on this rung,
When the next one is put into place,
I'll take one step up,
I don't know whats so far away,
But it's something you don't want me to touch.
A contest entry
- RAVENOUS FETISH for UNUSUAL poetry FORMS by dogpooper.
600 points, ended October 9, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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So here I am. A child, blank and new,
Scars remind me what you can see through,
Fear is gone, loneliness my clue,
Clarity's on its way...
I absolutely loved these lines-they spoke volumes to me-
this poem seemed so open, and ready, waiting for something, anything, a sign or a reply, but not desperately, at peace with the wait...really good poem, good luck. peace x
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You did a great job on your poem.
Thank you for your entry.
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THOUGHT PROVOKING
GOOD POEM,BUT LOOK AT YOUR SPELLING OF PATIENT. IS THAT HOW YOU WANT TO SPELL IT? YOU MIGHT BE ABLE TO CHANGE THE SPELLING IN TIME.
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