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Land of Make Believe { Gold }

You belong to a world of make believe,

where lilac dreams come alive,

and child's play tells its story.

 

Nimble hands craft over crinoline gown,

dressed straw hat tied in a bow,

leather shoes fitted so snug.

 

Her home Edwardian,

finery so elegant,

a Palace fit for this Princess and Queen.

 

Her secrets she shares,

just you and her,

as you silently listen, in hushes unheard.

 

I long for this time,

yet I feel so alone,

modern day doll discarded, forlorn

 

Time turned the clock,

and my workings are froze,

this little lady is now all grown up.

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  • daviscth silver member
    October 12, 2008

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    Your words have really brought the picture to life sissy. You have such a wonderful way of doing that. I love this. Good luck.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 10, 2008

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    I love how you've captured everything in the picture in your write and woven a fabulous story for it!! Wonderful write!


  • badnovocaine
    October 9, 2008

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    Aw this is such a sweet poem, and nice take on the prompt.
    I loved the title to partially why i decided to click on this one. Because I'm always wondering about whats in store for us.
    Anyways imaginative write.
    Good luck in the contest.
    It was a beautiful write.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Such beautiful imagery portrayed here, and quite sad. The end verse really wraps it up well, excellently penned. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Wow sis, this was brilliant-e!
    (with an accent on the end) hehe.

    Love your beautiful imagery
    and deep notions within.
    Amazing metaphors and this
    just left me breathless,
    Such meaning & power to your words..

    Best of luck in the contest

    xx


  • Abe 1
    October 8, 2008

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    well i like this cause ya showed this in a different way
    made time go backwards then all grown up again
    gd luck 2 ya babes
    abe


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Ah....you are after my own heart!The romantic era of past bygone days, often lures me away..The doll is a good way of taking us back...You creatively with imagery and descriptives taken there...The mood is lovely, and I love the poem...Good luck with this in the contest...Wow!


  • maralisa silver member
    October 8, 2008

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    bravo julie a brilliant poem I love the imagery and emotion its brilliant and the last line says so much more that in live we are not giong to sink low to others control good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • chilali
    October 8, 2008

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    Aw! Great take on the picture! A beautiful write indeed! I loved every bit of it. Good luck in the contest


  • KayJay
    October 7, 2008

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    A unique and powerful interpretation...you've brought a new level of revelation to this "pretty picture" . A truely inspired write... Best of luck.
    Ken


  • liduen silver member
    October 7, 2008

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    This is such a wonderful write! I especially like the last stanza - it's so sad!

    This is a unreleavant - but I think the font goes with the poem really well!

    Good luck in the contest!


  • aboomer silver member
    October 7, 2008

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    This goes real well with that picture!
    I like your wording, has a depth to it of sadness. Great images!
    Well done!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Awesome write here honey

    Oh where would we be if we didnt have the powers of our dreams a playland for adults to find their way

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