I'm only the smallest duckling,
and couldn't keep up with the rest.
They waddled off into the distance,
I wish I'd stayed home in the nest.
We left to go fishing this morning,
my mummy, six brothers and I,
but somehow I seem to have lost them.
and now there's just me and the sky.
It's hard to pretend I'm not frightened,
but mum often told me one thing;
if the great lake of life gets too scary,
then lift your head high - and sing.
A contest entry
- Reach For The Sky by paperparadox.
1200 points, ended October 11, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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congrats on the trophy...you have made the duck immortal with the beautiful words....enjoyed it ,the smooth flow of words and rhyme is appreciable
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Thank you for your entry...
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Length: 12/12
Rhyme: Good abcb rhyme scheme. Score: 12/12.
Spelling/grammar: Lovely! Score: 12/12
Flow: Really good! Well done. Score: 12/12
Total score: 48/48 (Perfect score...yay!)
I can't fault this lovely piece ~ congratulations!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this great entry. Thank you for your time and effort, and best of luck! 
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