She gently dances, impatient but tied.
Strong in her youth, she’s now weathered and worn.
She feels the pull of the outgoing tide.
She gently dances, impatient but tied.
Seagoing days, still remembered with pride,
fade into the past and she’s left forlorn.
She gently dances, impatient but tied.
Strong in her youth, she’s now weathered and worn.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: www.photobucket.com
Iambic Pentameter Triolet
Triolet Form: ABaAabAB
A contest entry
- Triolet PIF by carole21.
750 points, ended October 15, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Formed Poetry Only by misticmoonlite.
825 points, ended January 20, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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beautiful triolet
you penned this with pride and form to show resilence, thank you for this entry, and good luck
MM
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this poem is beautiful.. formed poetry, maybe I should try it again.. but you see you make it look so easy.. but its not for me anyway.. the poem itself is excellent, just beautiful . it has a calming feel to it.
Congratulations on the Gold Trophy and good luck in this contest
kat
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Lovely Triolet
Congratulations on winning the Gold! A beautiful poem, well deserving of the top prize.
Take care, Sandy 
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wonderfully penned.
loved this good luck
Passions
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I really like this poem..beautifully done.
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very nicely done . . thanks for the contest entry
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Lovely triolet indeed, full of imagery that doesn't need the picture, yet captures it wonderfully
Gaylene
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You have created a triolet -
read with such ease - that one wonders if this style is not a natural for you. I loved the personification, and like some of us, we get impatient when the years go buy and there is still so 'much' within us. Best for you in the contest. Frans
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Wow, this poem is so adorable and it makes me miss the times out on the open sea fishing ^_^
That form is a clever one, I wonder if its as hard as it looks...
Best of luck in the contest!
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I so took this to heart. More than boats fit this strong and superb poem. Very nice work that I will reurn to again.
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