As soon as she bends over
to poke the fire in those cheeky pink pyjamas
he starts to go cock - eyed.
Ogling that blancmange - esque bottom
as she stabs furious at the coal
with one eye-
and trying to train the other on "Match Of The Day"
renders him insane.
A blaze rages
game on.
Author notes
POD CONTEST. How best to punish people when they interrupt your favourite television program.
A contest entry
- Poem of the Day - POD by Arkbear.
400 points, ended October 11, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest for free verse poems... PW of Oct'08 is allowed by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended October 18, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Passion by Rhythm Child.
550 points, ended December 8, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Laugh by poets whisper.
700 points, ended January 26, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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A good one here and I enjoyed the read! Thank you for your entry and good luck
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LOL I have been there!!!! This was tooo good LOL loved it!
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child) -
this is witty and dare i say verry rude shame on you lol i liked this some cliver word play to mate, its good to see you're back on form
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lol, surely a fireside moment...
very descriptive... and clever
cheeky pink pyjamas on a blackmange-esque bottom
Reminds me of the song Bootylicious of Destiny's Child
This is an enjoyable read
seems like we've also been ogling...
Thanks for sharing this
Anna Lee
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Hahaha....adult and witty.
Good luck,
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back of the net!
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Hi there, and welcome to the POD!
I love how you've taken an ordinary moment in life and made the story both vivid and funny. While there's a lot to be said for brevity in poetry, I too would have liked to see more to this...outside of that, I really have no suggestions. Thank you for the smile first thing this morning!
My scores will be in with the final notes...thank you for joining us, and good luck!
Best wishes,
~J.
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Alex, my man! Lol, not what I expected at all! I expected an ageing romance! None the less, a fab piece we have here honey. Still grinning xx
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Welcome, Floorboards!
Game on, for Sure! You had your's on with this write. I am still chuckling. Amazing visuals and a 'tongue in cheek' humor that is fresh and vibrant, and a joy to read.
Hopefully, our friend in the above write has a DVR..**
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Hi there and welcome to the POD first off let me say that I did like this unique and funny, I would of loved to have seen more of it though.But other then that it is a good piece my score will appear at the end of the contest please do not edit until the contest is over goodluck
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Hey welcome to the POD
Not where my mind went after reading the title for sure This is very amusing and saucy 
You have done a great job with teasing the imagery, twisting it from one to another very effectively.
I love the theme, certainly very unique! I really have nothing to critique here, except maybe you've left me wanting a lot more! A very creative and funny piece, well written.
Scores will be sent to your host at end of judging.
Please, no editing until after awards have been given out.
Good luck
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Witty
excellently drafted and phenomenonally encrafted a terse verse which isnt an inch adverse and which itself is an ad and a verse hehehehehe Alex the Great from Macedonia rules the roost and gives a boost to the humerus in me hahahahhaa Shubs
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Oh my, I was expecting a sweet, cosy poem of togetherness when I read the title, guess it still got cosy and there was togetherness even if one of you was red raw by the fire and the other fired up by the football!
Imagery,humour and a surprize all inked into the squiditity of the scenario.
Especially liked " blancmange-esque"
Bravo
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lmao... I'm gonna have to start calling you Dr.
You certainly have the best medicine.
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LOLOLOL - what an image!!
Definitely unique, to me anyways. And imagery is good...lol....
"if" I were judging, though, I would tell you to take advantage of the lines available....then again, for this - 10 lines leaves an impact...
best wishes in the contest.
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bunchnbunch
very funny and well written
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