A smile can only take you so far.
Your dreams will never come true by wishing on a star.
Sticks and stones will break your bones.
Words will crush the happiness from your soul.
Your world and everything you know
spirals out of control.
Never trust the trusting.
Now close your eyes and see me fall,
all the while knowing you're the reason
I've lost it all.
Falling farther and farther
into this black abyss.
Leaving behind only the ones you'll never miss.
So frown young one and know the truth.
As the lies wrap painfully around your throat,
to form a noose.
Close your eyes young one,
and feel yourself fall.
All the while knowing,
your final fall
will end
it
all.
Author notes
I was again betrayed, and almost lost a few friends because a rumor was spread. I was angry in writing this, and to me it seems like a life lesson. Though everyone says to smile in your darkest of days,truly it gets you no where. Wishing on a star will leave you empty handed. Sticks and stones will break bones and words despite effort can completly destroy a person and strip them of any pride and happiness.
Never trust the trusting; I've learned all of these the hard way but this struck the final blow. I trusted her and she trusted someone else with my secret that only used it to hurt me.
It makes you feel as if your world and everything you once knew has dissapeared never to return again. As if a piece of you is dead.
So its time to kill the past to hang it and rid myself of it, and the people in it. I will from now on live to learn, learn to love,
and love to laugh.
Cause my final fall...
ended it all.
A contest entry
- Don't Mind Me [[I'm Only Dying]] --- Dirty Pretty Contest by EvenStarsBreak--x.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - To say goodbye by BleedingBlackTears.
600 points, ended December 3, 2008, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It made me smile. Normally, poems DONT make me smile. The catchy and true lyrics, though... that's what it is.
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very good
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well done bravo bravo
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loved it
Wonderfully amazing. It was amazing i love how you made your font go down to a point, AMAZING it just adds the the theme "falling" i loved it!!!! AHHHHHHH -
Wonderful imagery. =] It was very nicely written, great work. Thank you for the entry and good luck.
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I'll give you one more day to add your prompt poem. Please read the rules, or I will be sadly forced to disqualify you. (please do, you have such a wonderful entry).
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