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What turns you on?

In moments of madness,
I lick my lips and envisage,
Me committing acts of extreme violence.
Sometimes, I'd be making a sandwich and the blade,
slicing through the ripe tomatoe...oooh, would send shivers down my spine...

and you with you back facing me, your neck, would look so ripe so ready to be sliced.

And I would close my eyes and envisage what your neck would look like cut open, with your crimson, life force flowing freely, from the cut...staining the shiny silver blade, in my hand.

How would it flow?  Would it spuirt?  Would it splirt?...

Overcome with euphoria, I feel myself become excited and aroused, my breathing becomes laboured.

You touch your cool fingers to my face I look and smile at you.

"Would you like tomatoe with your cheese?", I ask.

"No thank you", you say.

And I smile to myself and think, good answer and let out a sigh of relief.

Until next time I think.

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  • well i shall remember not to invite you over for a cheese and tomato toastie, you might miss the toastie and bite me. a good poem


  • Joseph Hollis
    October 10, 2008
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    Dark and Provocative

    I enjoyed the read.
    It's nice to see private thoughts out on display like this. Well done.


  • Transcend All
    October 10, 2008

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    Transcend All

    I had to read this a few times, I found that each time I pulled something different from it. Something erotic and dark, something familiar ! I haven't written anything in so long, it's good to see that you've broken through.


    Namaste'


  • emc2
    October 7, 2008
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    Wow! Very different. It is kinda terrifying. I had shivers go down my spine. Good details. The questions were appropriate for this poem, because it allowed the reader to have a better sense of what is going through your head. I like the way you ended it with "Until the next time."

  • much-ado
    October 7, 2008

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    this is... terrifying. and gave me shivers.
    intreguing!
    the dark side of life is so much more fascinating than the bright

  • Anno
    October 7, 2008
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    It's been a while since I've written something, hopefully my constipation is over.

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