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Storm Potion

In the height of a raging storm
 I cast a spell and love was born

The lightning flashed with silver light
Upon the woman most revealing sight

The potion was brewed with magic dreams
To capture her heart and other things

She came to me on like a spinning wind
Alas perhaps some think it is a sin

But with the spell cast I start the fire
To say I am sorry would make me a liar

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  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    November 10, 2008

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    A chant to capture the most alluring of catches. Of course, I have to like this, the title says so
    Love the flow and overall feeling.

    Thank you for entering and good luck.
    Storm


  • Overcast
    November 3, 2008

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    The tone and the general idea of the poem is quite something.Although I must say :
    ' Upon the woman most revealing sight' ? I don't know..something seems remiss, there.Just an opinion.
    Good luck with the contest!

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    the magic potion of a brew called love, spell cased and heart captured.whirl winds, lights flashing...a beautiful woman is revealed...winner wrote all over it my friend


  • Cynthia Gaines
    October 14, 2008
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    Brilliant!!!

    Best of luck in the contest!!! Peace Always, Cyn

  • Bad Bill gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    I like the way this is written, as I've always liked rhyming couplets. Good work and good luck in the contest.

    Bill


  • Sandygram silver member
    October 9, 2008

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    Wonderful Poem

    Well you have cast a spell with your beautiful rhyme. Your words bring a smile. Thank you for this lovely happy poem. Perfect flow too.

    Poof!! Let the spell begin.

    Take care,
    Bless You,
    Sandy

  • Judith Chandler
    October 8, 2008

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    Love Potion Number 9. That's what I thought of, going back in the history of love potions to the 60s! Your piece carries on very well in this tradition of potions that create love.

    Like the rhymes.


  • Akari
    October 7, 2008

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    Wow.

    Excellent write. This is such a wonderful poem. The love i share with the one i love, feels exactly like that. one that i cannot escape and never would. Good Job! Keep up the GREAT Work!


  • Melodies
    October 7, 2008

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    A fine spell that carries potent powers...

    Aye, all the love groups here at AP have caught fire and the faerie groups are having celebrations! And all because of YOU and your spells and spinning wind, fine Sir Poet Knight!

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