Rustling of dry leaves. In a slow silent breeze.
Dust and past, future lost in a twisted contrast.
Breathing in mankind, through my mind.
Grasping my memories failed attempts to be enshrined.
Dirt and skin cracked and bled, screaming hollow souls lost and dead.
I walk down the lone path, arched doorway looming like a forsaken wrath.
Feel me inside my forgotten life, intestines clenching, turning, burning, inner strife.
Rusted distortion of stones making faces, reflecting flashing dreams of times and ancient places.
Your flesh folds with atmosphere, wispy embraces.
Nothingness flows and leaves no traces.
No more loss, tired and worn slowly step across.
No more hope, nothing to hold and nothing left to cope.
This is forever this is the door, words, souls, lives lost in the crumbling stories of lore.
I walk down the lone path, arched doorway looming like a forsaken wrath.
Taking me in, once and for all. Trapped forever, lost in spiritual enthrall.
In a list
A contest entry
- Friday Fun :) by Starz of Heaven.
550 points, ended October 10, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Extravaganza 3/ rhyme only by piccola.
600 points, ended October 12, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your favorite by whispernthedark.
790 points, ended November 7, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is wonderful, I love your rhyme scheme. Thank you so much for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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As a person that writes alot of dark poems I did enjoy this it is amazing from the first line to the last thank you for your entry be well
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Bravo! A very stunning write. You've got an incredible talent in the rhyming department, and how you've incorporated it into the flow of your poem. Very well done.
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wow
very intense, and i'm so jealous of your rhyming. i usually do free form because it hurts my brain to try to write a meaningful poem for myself and still concentrate on making it sound pretty.
"This is forever this is the door, words, souls, lives lost in the crumbling stories of lore.
I walk down the lone path, arched doorway looming like a forsaken wrath.
Taking me in, once and for all. Trapped forever, lost in spiritual enthrall. "
this was my favorite part. it all flowed well and i loved it. thanks for the comment on my write as well, i appreciate it!
--katy
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