I hear your murmur
beneath a heaving celeste
of tempestuous froth
a sing-song voice
of inevitable mortality
eclipsed
among brackish sprays
and sable tinctures
the seraph of an oceanic steppe-
condemned as a nautical harvester
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Angelflower.
900 points, ended October 22, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A very wonderfully written piece! I truly love the vivid imagery as well as the flow. you did such a wonderful job, thank you very much for sharing. best of luck in the contest.
Angel
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well, that sing-song voice must be mine... (I should put it to better use...) but such a voice eclipsed? (now you know that when you write a poem with a hypothetical 'you' every remotely-likely reader jumps into the role...!)
Tragic indeed, about the relationships- the condemned part speaks of superficial relationships... harvesting but never quite gaining... whatever it is that fulfills a relationship... (hmmm can't quite verbalize it)...
I'm glad you had a message in mind, and didn't get sidtracked by the verbiage...
I'd like to see that ocean steppe...
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I have missed your views on my attempted writes
I am glad that my words take you on a journey, although not always very mystical or grand -
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hey, what a coincidence- I just mail-ordered a pair of glasses- one side lets in only the mystical, and the other side the grand... now I can journey to that ocean steppe with new perception...
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I bet you can even see 3 dimensional with/without them
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Are mermaid angels ever easy to explain?. I think though, you haev given a whimsical pic prompt a sobering interpretation. You moved well beyond what was seen and given the reader a thinker! This piece is great whether the pic is there or not. Geo
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ha, I am finding out that they are almost as hard to explain as heffalumps and wishing wells
Thanks
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well first off thats a beautiful picture! and it def. helps with the poem which is really good
great write,
~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~ -
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Thanks bunches
For some reason it was not an easy picture to write to.
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