You're so pure it drives me crazy,
With your kind and innocent ways.
You never doubt your love,
It glistens white as snow.
You always smile when you see him,
You positively glow.
But when he crushes your pure soul,
I'll be waiting here for you,
As I always have been,
Knowing that with me,
You'd soar.
Author notes
I used option 2)Secret love; do they know you exist? or a forbidden love because of friends or family.
colie50
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This is cute... simplistic, but very sweet. or bittersweet I guess you could say. it sucks when they just don't realize...
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I LOVE the first two stanzas!!! No doubt!!! The meaning to the last stanza is amazing, but the rhythyms a bit choppy mate :-P. Smooth it out a tad bit, and boom, you have another piece of perfection!!! Well done!
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Actually, it wasn't really intended rhyming =/
The first two lines are choppy syllable-wise, though D=
Snow and glow just happened to rhyme. I'll see what I can do to smooth it out a bit
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This is such a sweet poem... full of patience and understanding. I really enjoyed reading the piece, thank you for entering the contest!
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I like where you took this prompt, as it is very near and dear to my heart at the moment. beautiful and to the point. bravo!
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I read a quote once, I don't remember the exact words but it stated that those we loved and truly cared about we would be willing to let them go because we love them so much, and because we don't want to hurt them.
Eh.
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