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I Try To Cry

I try to cry
No tears fall
My eyes are dry
No feeling at all

So cold
And full of dread
For I was told
That I am dead

I look around
Just to find
There is no ground
And nothing kind

Just black
No light
I find a fact
I’m full of fright

This is death

Author notes

lol. this is the other one tht corresponds to "no more than stone". i wrote this at my friends house while listening to him play the guitar. he was playin somethin sad so i wrote something sad.

what is the wierdest part to you?

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  • DemonicChanel420
    October 7, 2008
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    I think that the last 4 lines are a little off, they don't quite flow as well as the rest of the poem, but the rest of it is great! I like the style of rhyming that you chose, it really helps to get the meaning across. I really like it though, all together, a good write!!!