true love is lighter than air
it floats,
gravity does not bring it down.
love does not demand from each other
nor pull each other's legs
selflessness as shade,
gives shelter to other.
identities merge in selflessness
hearts grow fonder,
when they are near
all nights are full moon nights.
when love is not burdened
it sails smooth,
like river slipping through course
effortlessly,
taking defined course spontaneously,
season after season.
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pure love is effortless venture
flowing smooth, balancing on toes.
Author notes
The joy of love is nothing except to balance with it...Unknown
A contest entry
- The joy of love.. by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended October 9, 2008, 8 entries
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The imqages of the love are very beautifully defined..and thety brought a sense of an agreement with the readers..I agree with your point of view..and the delicacy of this write touches me as well..well done...
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I like the ideas and images very much, well done! There are many quotes about this, one is "He's not heavy, he's my brother."
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very kewl write
its flows very well and yes it does of a few spelling errors but i cant say much about that because i know nearly all of my work has spelling errors cause im bad at spelling lol but in any case very kewl!
~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~ -
Beautiful
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Pretty
you do have some spelling errors...technicality but otherwise a wonderful write with a sentimental touch. Great read...but you might want to read through and clear up the clerical errors...sorry if I sound like an English teacher lol...but I would want someone to do the same for me...Yours in poetry,
gypsy
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