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Eternal Escape

We count the stars on a carpet of sky,
realizing dreams on a warm bed of sand
and the rolling tide seems to mystify,
as wandering fingers reach for my hand.

Together we know the world will be ours,
lost in forever our souls become one.
We journey beyond that carpet of stars,
where interlaced love cannot be undone.

I cherish these moments, I cherish your touch,
I cherish these feelings, I cherish the beach,
I love you my darling, I love you so much;
you show me that joy is well within reach.

Whenever the world closes in on your space,
remember this moment, come back to this place.

 

 

 

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Shakespearean Sonnet

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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    This poem speaks of a fantasy and a love we can all dream to have! Romantic as I see the two in my mind lying on the beach and slowly touching hands!

    I LOVE the Shakesperean Sonnet! You really captured my heart with this poem!

    Thank you for entering!
    Becks


    • Amera gold member
      November 11, 2008
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      Oh Becks! Winning this contest means more to me than just any contest. This is a true story! Thank you so much.


  • Lyndon gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    This is a very appealing sonnet indeed.
    It does say "I love you" in a very melodic and special way. The admirable thing is the lines have fallen down in place so effortlessly. Ron.

    • Amera gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you Ron, what a nice comment.


  • second-born
    October 9, 2008

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    wow...this is truly an 'eternal escape' from other pieces...simple yet very elegant...with the sincerest emotions only two people who are so much in love could ever experience...what a very lovely sonnet indeed!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    How beautiful! Such tenderness and love and purity in this write sis!

    Brought a warm glow to this cold heart!




  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 7, 2008
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    I think I will, so bookmarked.


  • echo-ink
    October 7, 2008

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    This was beautiful, there's nothing as wonderful as a love poem from our Amera,
    BRAVO!!!
    Love, Bell,xx


  • StarEyes
    October 7, 2008

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    Sis,

    This is truly beautiful! What a great job you did on this one! Beautiful!!! This touches ones heart deeply! You are soooooo wonderful when writing in form!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 7, 2008
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    Not bad, Sis.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 7, 2008

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    This poem truly shines!! This is an incredible write sis!! You did a fantabulous job!! You truly gave a glowing picture!! I love the imagery and the details and descriptions!! This is real talent!! You are amazing sis!! You did a beautiful job with this write!! Every line and every stanza are perfect!! I love it!! Hugs Love u sis!!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    I do so love a love sonnet!!!

    Beautifully and lovingly done!

    Always nice to have seen the opposition before posting

    Great stuff!

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