Your seductive whispers haunt
me in my sleep, it creeps
from under my bed like a
monster.
Your smile plays hide-and-seek
with the truth; a desperate
game of forgive & forget.
You take advantage of a kiss,
tying me down to a city so dead
But how can I forget how you
took over me; one cruel lie
before the next.
Sympathy comes with my denial.
I can't lose you even if I tried.
Hands weathered from comforting
a broken soul too many times.
Words sounding too familiar
because I've said that I'm sorry
countless times
You can't do this to me.
Not anymore.
Author notes
"I raise my hands and I hit at his arms, pushing at them, trying to get him away from me because I can’t let this happen, I don’t want to let it get this far. It’s against his laws, the laws of the world he forced me to live in, a world I never wanted to be a part of until he made me."
Eden (Fanfiction.com)
OPTION 3
A contest entry
- One Dark Prompt by Never.Give.Up.
300 points, ended October 8, 2008, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Want You to .:.Scare.:. Me!! by DecorusApparatus.
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Comments
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Emotion here is really good. The thing that struck me most about the poem was the rhythm. I wanted to keep reading and reading and I have o admit there was a little sadness when it was over. With the final two lines it changed this poem. It gave it a certain power and strength that it needed to be memorable.
"a desperate
game of forgive & forget."
I'm not totally sure why but those lines made me smile. I guess it was the clever way that they were worded, and they added a nameless something to this poem.
Thankyou very much for entering this in my contest.
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Wonderful write and excellent take on the prompt, I really like how you made it yours.
Congrats on the silver!
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I really enjoyed reading this, you've captured my mind and eyes from the very beginning.
A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose
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