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Occasionally Realistic


For every fickle-eyed fancy
mistaken for heartwork aborning,

for every twinborn sigh explored
among rainbow-winged silk-storms

[this is beauty unhinged,

a pocketwatch hymn,
maroon-imbued and aching]


there’s a me without you
cracking moon-marrowed dreams
between ink-rooted fingers,

mapping out forever
on a blanket of breezes


[a bourbon-bruised mirage

of soft cherry-chalk jot monologues]


stitched across intangible stars.

Because this is just as infinite
as we were meant to be,

[and I thought you knew this]

as there is only so much
magic left to spin

from these
water-weaved moonbeams,
connecting my limbs.

[Because even in my arms,
you were far beyond my reach.]


Maybe next time I won’t try
to pry kisses out from cobble.

[Maybe next time I’ll be careful
what I wish for.]

Author notes

Picture Credit: Opposites Attract by ~D-Bird

http://d-bird.deviantart.com/art/Opposites-Attract-43548147

This seems a bit unventured.

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  • Hmmm. I'm speechless.


  • Nickelspring gold member
    January 7
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    Beautiful

    I love your magical use of language.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    January 3
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    a poem worthy of gold


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 7, 2008

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    Certainly an excellent take on the prompt. I enjoy your descriptive style. It creates such vivid imagery. Thank you for sharing.


  • FaerieNWonderland
    November 13, 2008
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    nice concept i really loved it


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    you use of language in this is captivating
    i loved the poem within a poem
    or almost... dual language or conversation


  • CaptainAwesome
    October 18, 2008

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    Incredible write! Great job


    there’s a me without you
    cracking moon-marrowed dreams
    between ink-rooted fingers

    This was probably my favorite part, but it kept my attention, had my thoughts in a net.
    Great Job!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 7, 2008
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    good luck


  • innocence jaded.xx
    October 7, 2008

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    Song: Over You by Daughtry.

    Picture: on deviantart.com, look up "opposites" & use a picture within the first two pages

    Title: Occasionally Realistic.

    Color: Maroon.

    Quote: Stop saying you're sorry.
    You wanna know something? I knew.
    I knew you didn't feel that way about me.
    I knew, and I still let it happen...
    because, well, I figured that one night with you was better than never.
    So, will you stop saying you're sorry?
    Because you didn't know better, but I did.


    Good luck

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