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angel in your heart

i don't like where we are
this places where we stand
i miss what we were
and i don't understand
what happen to us
where did we go wrong
was it something we said
or something we didn't
all the love is still there
i feel it each day
but somethings a miss
and i cant pin point what
we've drifted apart
our hearts aren't the same
the magic its gone
and we've lost our way
the look in your eyes
the devotion and love
has faded from within
and its like were not there
we get up each morning
we autopilot through life
never once seeing
all the hurt that we cause
the passion has faded
there's no fire or spark
your touch only hurts now
its tears us apart
i wait and i watch
for something i'm not sure
is it still worth it for you
am i still the angel in your heart

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  • Sick Sunshine
    October 24, 2008
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    =(


  • Mary Jane.
    October 24, 2008

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    This is very good. I've felt like this a few times in the past. Not knowing what is wrong but sensing it nonetheless. I can really relate to this poem and I loved the flow. Good luck and thanks for entering.
    Sarah


  • fake-or-real-smile
    October 19, 2008

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    I'm not actually sure how to respond to this....wow.

    Fantastic write, just one tiny piece of criticism - double check before you post "and i don't understand
    what happen to us" is that supposed to read "what happened to us"? Also puncuation, it depends on the writer but I find poems look better with puncuation

    I love the way this poem is written though, when things fall apart the questions you asked we all ask ourselves I think.

    well done, good luck and thank you for entering.

    Also, please please please remember to put the option you chose in N/A, it does state this in the rules.

    Rebecca

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  • justgot2loveme
    October 12, 2008

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    this is so touching, full of emotions.
    sad when love starts to fade. I am sure
    many could relate to this piece.
    I hope you are still the angel in his heart.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Justgot2loveme


    • solitarytear
      October 13, 2008
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      thank you

      for your kind words and comment.....i to hope i'm still his angel.....for his still mine


  • jasminerose
    October 12, 2008

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    A very moving piece you have penned here about loss of love and insecure feelings. Beautiful in emotions!
    My best to you in this contest!
    Linda

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