the yellow surrounds me,
and i keep breathing, breathing,
the air gets walmer,
and i keep sweating, sweating,
the plastic traps me,
and i keep screaming, screaming,
the blackness contains me,
and i keep crying, crying,
the air in my lungs lessens,
and i keep gasping, gasping,
the laughter gets louder,
and i keep pounding, pounding,
the life begins to leave my body,
and i am struggling, struggling,
the darkness pulls me,
and i am losing, losing,
the lifeforce leaves me,
and i am dying, dying,
the air is pounded in me,
and i am panicking, panicking,
the truth blinds me,
and i am blinking, blinking,
the questions start coming,
and i am lying, lying.
In a list
A contest entry
- inspire me........how far have you come? by doesne1care.
465 points, ended October 24, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Life changing (Big points!!) by A m b r e a.
850 points, ended October 19, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Is this a true event? And In my rules it states that you must explain how this event changed your life in the AN...please do so or I will have to DQ you. Thank you! I will comment after you do so.
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wow, really powerful piece there, you litrally can feel your breth going as you read this poem.
thankyou for sharing this with me, and well done for wrinting it, a very powerful piece and i dont quite no what to sy expect wow xx -
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thanks alot,
im glad someone liked it
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