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Summer & Winter


Summer

Campers are in bed,
and as I read by lantern,
crickets sing for me.


Winter

Prints of a rabbit
mar the field they cross, and yet
beauty is enhanced.

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  • Puppydog gold member
    May 2

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    I just love nature and its many wonders and you have captured so beautifully two beautiful things one can experience in nature, simple yet beautiful!!!!!


  • tigerrose110203
    January 8
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    so simple, so sweet, and yet, so telling. lovely write!


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    October 7, 2008

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    Both hiaku's are realy good I like them just like they are, but I must confess the WINTER is my favorite.
    Thank you for your entries and good luck in the contest.
    ED.